SORRY BEING DISTRACTED BY DRAGON AGE, BUT!
OK SO I WILL GIVE U ADVICE ON THIS BC I HAVE BEEN TOLD IN THE PAST I AM GOOD BUT THAT IS LIE. BUT HERE IS HOW I DO: atmosphere is everything.
and since u r writing, u cant do things like visual media, u need to use words. and it isn’t just, like, imagery tho ofc that always helps &is good. there’s also the writing version of mood music aka how u string ur sentences together aka the tempo and structure or whathaveu idk how to explain with words (lol the irony)
wow lemme not use ‘u’ instead of you that’s weirding me out ANYWAY
there’s a certain way to structure your sentences, either by short choppy bursts or by long drawn out borderline running sentences or a mixture of the two? and it can help create that “weird/unnatural” feeling
also it depends on when/where/what situation that’s going on??? like tbh if you send me these snippets i can help you, um, more directly?
but an important thing ot keep in mind is atmosphere! and in these situations it really is more show than tell—but don’t show everything. show just enough to set up what you need to set up and help the atmosphere, but hold back
always hold back, exactly, bc when dealing with creepy shit sometimes the CREEPIEST SHIT is the not-knowing and the no answers
this was no help at all sorry